4 – 15

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“Here,” said Basra, trotting down the front Cathedral steps to rejoin them. She held a small handful of wands, mass-produced models with thick grips and shiny new clickers that suggested they’d never been used. To Darling she gave two; Branwen accepted one, looking somewhat bemused.

“The shrine of Avei in there has wands?” Darling said in surprise. “I thought you lot were all about blades and traditional enchantment and whatnot.”

“That’s what I’m carrying,” Basra said, patting the sword now buckled at her waist, “but with all due respect—however much is due—I’m not going to assume either of you can handle a real weapon. And no, the shrine doesn’t, but the Holy Legion’s armory is pretty well-equipped.”

“I’m not shooting anybody,” Branwen insisted, holding the wand as gingerly as she might a live snake. “Izarites offer harm to no one.”

“That’s fine,” Basra said condescendingly. “I’ve given you the thing, so when you die from not defending yourself nobody can say it’s my fault. All right, you!” She pointed at the crow currently perched atop a nearby lamp post. “Which way are we heading?”

Fortunately, at this hour, even the Cathedral’s main steps were deserted. Tiraas was a city that never stopped glowing, nor truly slept, but it was a city whose weather often didn’t encourage sightseeing and lollygagging after dark. This was one such night; fog that couldn’t seem to decide whether it wanted to be a gloomy drizzle had dampened everything, reducing the fairy lamps to fuzzy patches of disembodied glow and obscuring the architectural splendor of Imperial Square. There was probably nobody about but the local constabulary, and none happened to be close enough to see a Bishop of the Universal Church addressing a bird.

The crow ruffled is feathers, tilting its head to peer down at her inquisitively.

“Well?” Basra prompted after a moment, then scowled. “…is that her? That had better be her. If I’m trying to have a conversation with some random carrion-eating feather duster, I’m gonna stab somebody.”

“Well, we can’t have that,” said Mary, amused. As always, she didn’t visibly shift; she was just an elf now, and apparently always had been, standing on the toes of her moccasins atop the lamp post as though it were the most natural thing in the world. Those non-changing transitions were starting to give Darling a sense of vertigo. “At least, not before it’s time. For me to lead you directly through the city would garner more attention than I like, but I assume you can follow directions well enough. You should start with the attack site; the crime is still fresh, and undiscovered. The Jackal has made arrangements and is counting on it remaining so until morning. Get there now and you can begin disrupting his plans.”

“And where is there?” Andros demanded.

Mary grinned. “Go to the Temple of Izara. Ask for Hernfeldt, and when they try to stop you, insist.”

“Oh, no,” Branwen whispered, and took off at a near run. The others quickly fell into step behind her, Basra muttering irritably under her breath. Behind them came the flapping of wings as their guide disappeared into the night.

Branwen was in surprisingly good shape. Like most of the main temples, that of Izara wasn’t far from Imperial Square; the city planners, and/or whatever Izarites had lobbied them, had placed it prominently at another large intersection. Nonetheless, it was ordinarily a walk of fifteen minutes. They made it in five, with Branwen staying in the lead of the group and never growing so much as winded, despite her short stature and generally cushiony appearance. She didn’t visibly glow during the trip, but drawing on divine healing may have helped explain her sudden vigor.

“You know this Hernfeldt?” Darling asked as they went. He and Andros had long enough legs to keep up with her vigorous trot without breaking into a jog themselves. Basra was having a little more trouble, being forced to lope for a few steps every minute or so, and looked increasingly annoyed by it.

“Yes,” Branwen said, uncharacteristically terse.

“You don’t seem surprised to hear of this,” Andros rumbled.

She shook her head, neither slowing nor looking back at him. They passed a few people, now, some of whom recognized at least part of their group and bowed to them, but Branwen didn’t allow them to slow and engage in pleasantries. “No follower of Izara deserves…that.”

“All the so-called victims deserved what they got,” Basra said snidely from the rear of the group. “That’s what they all have in common.”

To this, Branwen made no reply.

The city’s layout being what it was, they actually approached the Temple of Izara from the rear and had to proceed along its whole length to round the building and reach the front entrance. Apparently there was no back way in, which struck Darling as odd… Or perhaps it was just on the other side, or maybe underground. Regardless, there wasn’t a visible break in the towering wrought iron fence that enclosed the temple grounds until they rounded the corner into the square ahead. The archway leading into the front garden was bracketed by two Silver Legionnaires on either side, who stiffened and saluted Basra as they passed within.

While the Cathedral and the main temples of Avei and Omnu favored towering spires and sloped roofs, the Temple of Izara had a softer look. Set well back from the street, surrounded by lush flower gardens well-illuminated with fairy lamps, the white marble structure might actually have looked rather squat and blocky if not for its several gilded domes, stained-glass windows heavily favoring pink, and the vines and climbing roses ascending many of its walls. Overall it had a gentle look, even in the darkness, which the four Bishops didn’t pause to appreciate.

Branwen took the steps up to the main entrance at a near run. At this hour, the large doors were shut, though of course they weren’t locked; the acolytes of Izara made themselves available at any and all times, which resulted in good-natured jokes about “love emergencies.” Two more Legionnaires guarded the entrance. They, too, were stiffly at attention in Basra’s presence, which deprived Darling of the chance to observe some interfaith tensions in action. He’d heard that guarding Izarite temples was considered a punishment duty among Avenists.

The main hall was a similarly soft place, lit by fairy lamps and some exterior light through towering pink windows. It was full of pillows, low couches, the sweet scent of incense and the sound of gently splashing fountains. A few people were about, sitting or strolling together, some talking in low voices.

“Bishop Snowe,” a tall, willowy blonde woman greeted them, gliding over from the shade of a huge potted fern. “Your Graces, this is a surprise. How can—”

“We need Hernfeldt,” Branwen cut her off.

The woman raised her eyebrows. “Brother Hernfeldt is in seclusion in his chambers this evening,” she said carefully, “communing with the goddess. He is not to be disturbed.”

“He’s been pretty well disturbed, if our source is correct,” Basra remarked.

“One’s meditations are not to be—”

“Now!” Branwen said sharply. “This is a matter of life and death, Zoe!”

The priestess leaned back in surprise. “I…if you say so, Bishop. I hope we are not disrupting him frivolously. Abdul, please take the door position?”

Leaving another priest to assume her post greeting visitors, Zoe led them to an arched doorway off to one side of the hall. Apparently she was, indeed, taking Branwen’s orders seriously; at least, she set as rapid a pace as she could without causing a disturbance in the great hall. There was probably not much running in a temple of the goddess of love.

“You two,” Basra said sharply to another pair of Legionnaires standing inside the front doors. “With us.”

They exchanged a glance. “Ma’am, we’re assigned to guard—”

“Did I ask for your opinion, soldier?”

“No, ma’am!”

Zoe led them through the halls of the temple, the four Bishops right behind her and the two Legionnaires bringing up the rear. They walked in tense silence, the priestess having quickly picked up the mood. Well, Izarites were famously empathetic, after all. The temple’s layout seemed somewhat obfuscatory, assuming Zoe was taking them on as direct a route as possible; they changed direction and seemed to have to backtrack as they climbed floors, no single staircase apparently continuing for more than one story. Annoying as it was, Darling could appreciate the tactical benefit; anybody not familiar with these corridors would quickly become lost. Of course, Izarites being as they were, they probably had different reasons, but he didn’t understand their worldview deeply enough to interpret their architectural choices.

Finally, though, Zoe brought them to a stop outside a thick oak door on an upper corridor. Branwen strode up to this and rapped sharply with her knuckles. “Brother Hernfeldt?”

“Waste of time,” Andros growled. “We were told it was already too late.”

“Too late?” Zoe looked back and forth between them. “What is going on?”

“It’s locked,” Branwen said, jiggling the knob uselessly. “Blast… He really was in seclusion.”

“Allow me.” Darling knelt beside the door, extracting lock picks from within his sleeve.

“Oh,” Zoe fretted, “I don’t think you should be doing that…”

Before he could start working, however, Basra bumped him heavily with her hip, nearly sending him sprawling; he barely managed to keep a grip on his tools with one hand, catching himself with the other. She took one step back and drove her foot against the door in a powerful snap kick, wrenching it open with a crunch of wood.

“That also works,” he acknowledged, getting up. Before anybody could say anything else, Zoe screamed.

There was a brief traffic jam as all four Bishops tried to crowd into the door to look. Branwen was ultimately bumped forward into the room itself, Darling and Basra filling the opening and Andros craning his neck to see over them.

Brother Hernfeldt’s room was not large, nor ostentatious, but in keeping with Izarite aesthetics, it was more comfortable than the chambers of priests of other faiths tended to keep theirs. A large bed predominated the space, along with a cushy-looking sofa lining one entire wall and a much more modest desk and low bookcase opposite. He had apparently liked quilts; they were draped over the bed, couch and desk chair. The large one on the bed was a predominantly white and pink pattern, which very well showed off the blood drenching it.

Hernfeldt himself was a dwarf, or had been. He lay with his feet toward the door, pinned to his bed with the poker from his small fireplace driven clean through his chest.

Darling frowned. This was, indeed, not the work of his girls; too sloppy, no touch added to signify a Wreath link. The Jackal, from what little he knew of the elf, could certainly have done it. But then, so could Mary. She was definitely playing some kind of game with him. How willing was she to sacrifice pawns to achieve her ends? What were her ends?

“The killings,” Zoe whispered, one hand over her mouth. “Oh…oh, no, Hernfeldt. I told him to leave the city…”

“What’s that?” Basra turned to her, arching an eyebrow. “You do know the killer’s been targeting the corrupt, then? What was this fellow about that drew his attention?”

“He…he had…” She swallowed. “…urges. He controlled himself, though! He would never have acted on… That is, the worship of our lady helps us to channel our desires, to emphasize what’s healthy over… Hernfeldt is—” Zoe choked on a sob, but continued. “He was a good man, he’d never have actually done…anything.”

“Uh huh,” Basra said dryly. “What was it, eh? Goats? Corpses? Little boys?”

“Enough, Bas,” Darling said firmly, pushing into the room and swiftly casing it. The Jackal—or whoever had done this—was good. The locked door meant he hadn’t gone in and out that way. There was one window, narrow, but big enough for a person to slip through. He crossed swiftly to this, studying it. Closed, but not latched. It wouldn’t latch from the outside.

“Pretty girls pissing on decoupage—”

“Basra!” he shouted, turning to glare at her. “Needle the Izarites on your own time.”

“Fine, fine,” she said, following him into the room. “Our perp is gone, I take it?”

“This was his exit.” Darling knelt, touching the thick carpet under the window. “Damp here… The rug’s color makes it hard to see, but these are footprints, not just splashing from a loose window. This is how he came and went. Look, there’s a roof right outside here… It’s almost too easy.”

“You two,” she said more curtly, turning back to the Legionnaires standing just outside the room. “This needs to be reported immediately. Notify your captain and have word sent to the city watch and the Church.”

The two soldiers exchanged another glance.

“And the High Commander, ma’am?” one prompted.

“Yes, yes,” Basra said impatiently, waving them off. “Go.”

They saluted in unison, then whirled and dashed back down the hall. Branwen had slipped out of the room and was now trying to comfort Zoe, who appeared nearly catatonic.

Darling pushed open the window and lifted one foot to rest on the frame. “I’m going to have a look, here, see if I can determine the route he used.”

“Foolish,” Andros rumbled, “to follow a badger into his den.”

“He’s in Tiraas,” Darling said grimly. “This isn’t his den. It’s mine.” He slipped nimbly through, splashing down on the stone outside.

Hernfeldt’s view had been somewhat obstructed by a sizable dome that terminated right outside his window, but it did make for a convenient escape route. Being a round roof on a square building, the dome left a lip of flat stone all around this section of the temple, widest at the corners and guarded by a low, crenelated wall. Just below this was another half-dome over a lower wing of the temple, providing an easy slide down—or, for someone as nimble as an elf, a path up. Right now, everything was slick with the spurting drizzle, but Darling didn’t doubt the Jackal could have made the climb.

Of course, climbing was a complete non-issue for the Crow…

He wasn’t terribly surprised when Andros and then Basra joined him outside.

“There,” he said, pointing over the edge. “Down that roof, and from there he could jump to that pillar in the fence. Flat-topped…not very good for keeping people out.”

“The Izarites don’t want to keep anybody out,” Basra said disgustedly. “Unfortunately for what’s-his-name.”

“Or he could have climbed the vines,” Andros said. “The pillar is too far to jump.”

“To far for us,” Darling corrected. “An elf could make that.”

“Elves are fast, but they are not strong,” the Huntsman growled. “Jumping a long distance requires muscular legs.”

“Look, I don’t presume to know how they do it, but believe me, I’ve seen firsthand what elves can and cannot jump. Trust me, one could get across that. I’m gonna take a closer look.”

“You’re gonna catch your death of three-story drop, is what,” Basra said. “Look, it’s not like you can—and there he goes.”

Darling vaulted over the edge, sliding neatly down the half-dome below to land on the lower rim of stone without losing his footing. Behind him, Andros slid down a little more carefully and less gracefully, but also without falling.

“Yeah, you two take the more dangerous route,” Basra called from above. “It’d be just awful if everybody failed to see how big your dicks are. I’ll meet you at the bottom.”

“Funny thing is,” Darling mused aloud, peering across at the thick pillar, “this is probably the one temple in the city where this isn’t the first time somebody’s said that.” Inwardly, he filed that away against Fauna’s theory about Basra. The heartless, as elves called them, were usually the most reckless members of whatever group they were in, and never the least. That was what got most of them caught.

“You are more adept on your feet than I expected,” Andros remarked.

“I’m not just a pretty face, Andros.”


“You were right,” he said, peering over, “there’s a thick vine cover here. Hm… Also no lights nearby. This would be a perfect place to climb up.”

“It makes no difference,” Andros growled. “Tracking in the rain is hard. Tracking in the city is hard. Tracking elves under any circumstances is prohibitively hard. Together they add up to an impossibility. We are dependent upon that woman to tell us which way he went. Assuming she actually knows.”

“Makes you wonder, doesn’t it,” Darling mused, “what kind of game she’s playing. Seems to me that bringing us here to see all this first is just…”

“Wasting time.”

“Yup.” They exchanged a grim look. “Bas didn’t give you a wand. I assume you’ve got your own?”


“Good.” He slipped nimbly over the side and began to descend; the vines did, indeed, provide an excellent grip. Getting up this way would have been easy enough for him, probably as simple as a stroll through the meadow for an elf. “Don’t trust the Crow any farther than you absolutely must.”

“Obviously,” Andros said disdainfully, following him over. Though he was much bigger, his weight didn’t prove too much for the vines, and he was deft enough in his descent. Once he was relatively certain the Huntsman wasn’t going to fall on him, Darling didn’t give him any more attention for the rest of the way down.

Not trusting the Crow was, indeed, obvious, but he wasn’t just making conversation. Mary had all the knowledge she needed to turn the other Bishops against him with a few well-chosen words. He could choose words, too, and it was never too early to start cutting into her credibility.


She ruffled her feathers, scattering raindrops, watching the two men descend from a convenient roof across the street. They’d regroup outside, once they’d finished setting the Church, the Imperials and the Avenists on the Jackal’s trail. By the time she re-convened with the four Bishops to give them their next breadcrumbs, the forces set in motion would be great enough to make this his last visit to Tiraas even if these humans failed to deal with him themselves. It would be ideal if they managed, but if push came to shove, she could arrange for him to confess his involvements to whoever brought him down. It would be trickier to pull off, and carried less certainty that the information would lead to the result she wanted, but it would be something.

Could the Bishops deal with him? The Sister and the Huntsman were potent threats, and Darling was not to be underestimated. Even the Izarite had tactical use against a stealthy foe; it was very hard to sneak up on an empath. Still, she might need to give them a few nudges. Subtly, of course. It was important they think they’d done it without her help.

Mary felt the howling presence of dozens of maddened spirits even before she saw the two materialize on either side of her. Impressive. Invisibility was a parlor trick to eldei alai’shi, but few of them had mastered the subtleties of their expensive gifts well enough to hide from her.

“You should understand something, if you’re going to be leading Sweet around on adventures in the city,” Flora said in a pleasant tone.

“You have tacitly taken responsibility for his well-being,” said Fauna, her smile doing nothing to offset the tension in her frame.

“You know something of our…kind, I take it?”

“Of course, someone like you has dealt with headhunters before.”

“Every one I could find,” Mary replied calmly, in her elven form again.

Flora’s smile widened enough to show just the tips of her teeth. “Ever killed one?”

“I never tried.” She shook her head. “Pointless. You were dead the moment you walked into Athan’Khar. All that remains at question is how much time passes before you lie down and accept it… And how many you bring down with you.”

Fauna cocked her head to one side. “Interesting. What would you seek them out for, if not to kill them?”

“Because they were elves,” she said simply, “because they suffered, and because no one should have to be alone.”

The two exchanged a loaded glance that made her wonder about the nature of their relationship.

“So,” Flora drawled. “Think you could kill one?”

“Let alone two?”

“Aren’t you two supposed to be at home, asleep?”

“We’re supposed to do a lot of things.”

“Our teachers are very disappointed with us.”

“When they catch us.”

“Which has nothing to do with this. You were asked a question.”

“I really don’t have time for this tonight, girls,” she said mildly. “Kindly make your threats and be done before I have to resume guiding the humans. They’re clever, but I hate to leave them blundering around unsupervised with the Jackal in town.”

“Very well, if you’re in such a hurry,” said Flora, still with that icy smile. “You’re an impressive piece of work, but so are we.”

“Whatever you do, we can track you down.”

“And if it comes down to it, you are not a match for the both of us.”

“So whatever it is you’re planning for our Sweet, I suggest you be extremely cautious of his well-being.”

“We will hold you responsible for what happens to him.”

“If he comes back with so much as a stubbed toe or a bump on the head…”

“Whatever happens to him, will happen to you.”


Mary kicked her legs idly over the edge of the roof. “Two of you…apparently a matched set. That’s only the beginning of what’s new and fascinating about you. Already you’ve made it longer than most, and you are more stable, more sane and well-adjusted, than any headhunter I’ve encountered. And…a great deal of the credit for that, it appears, goes to Antonio Darling.”

“Precisely,” said Flora, nodding. “Hence our attachment to him.”

“I’ve seen men try to control eldei alai’shi before,” Mary went on, still calm as though she weren’t bracketed by maddened avatars of death. “It ends quickly, and exactly as they deserve. With him, though… It’s not about control, is it? There is care there. He is not only invested deeply in your welfare, he has actually managed to secure it. Something that no one, even no elf, has ever thought to try. No… I don’t want Darling harmed. I’m not certain what to make of him, just yet, but I strongly suspect I’ll want to wait and see how he develops.”

“The curiosity of a scientist examining a specimen,” Fauna said coldly. “That’s not what we’re looking for. Do we need to repeat our warning?”

They tensed as she flowed swiftly to her feet, but Mary made no aggressive move. Instead, she placed one hand over her heart, bowing to each of them in turn. “An’shala nau selenai. Valthiis nau selenai.”

Both of them reared back from her in surprise, going wide-eyed.

“Does that satisfy you?” Mary asked dryly.

“I think,” Flora said slowly, “that will do.”

“Very good, I’m glad we could settle this. Now if you’ll excuse me, I must continue to oversee my humans, otherwise they’ll probably fall in a hole or something. They’re such children.”

She took off in a flutter of dark wings before they had a chance to respond, leaving the two headhunters to stare after her in bemusement.

“Could she really be serious?” Fauna asked. “Would she go back on her word?”

“No. Not that one. She’s as tauhanwe as they come, but firmly, proudly elf. A vow like that… She won’t break it.”

“Then… I guess he’ll be safe, after all, with her watching over him.”

“Oh, well then, we can just go home and sleep safe and sound in our comfy beds.”

“There’s no need to be snide,” Fauna said reproachfully. Grinning, Flora gave her a quick one-armed hug.

No one could have seen, in the dark and the mist, the two shapes that soared silently across the street, leaping farther than even elves could have.

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19 thoughts on “4 – 15

    1. Cute and a beneficial relationship for both sides. Like a racoon raising two orphaned tiger cubs. I am just glad this isn’t a Wildbow story, or the relationship would be doomed to failure in unpredictably nasty circumstances. But then, things would already be so much worse if this were a Wildbow story.

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    2. Well, I am glad this isn’t a Wildbow story. As much as I love his writing, after a while “Let’s see how we can make things even worse” becomes exhausting. Worm could balance that out somewhat with humour, Pact couldn’t.


      1. Agreed.

        Loved worm, even if it was a touch too.dark overall, and much too.dark at times.
        But Pact, even if I liked the setting a lot, was too much of it, so I dropped it not even a third in.

        This one though, darling and his headhunters. Lovely work.


  1. If you support a hot time in the old town, vote for The Gods are Bastards!

    So! Allow me to take a little time and suss out what’s happening around here these days. I don’t like to prattle on about myself too much, but it’s relevant to note that I live with bipolar disorder, and am currently being dragged through a depressive phase. Nobody needs to worry bout me; I’m not a self-harm risk, and I’m definitely not about to abandon TGaB. Honestly, the satisfaction I get from working on this is the best treatment for depression I’ve tried yet. I don’t know how I’d manage without my story. Sometimes I’m not sure how I ever did. BUT, depression does make creative work of any kind very difficult. It takes me longer to get into the flow of a chapter, and starting out is like slogging through mud. I continue to get there, though! And eventually, the pendulum swings the other way.

    All this means my promised bonus chapters are still creatively bottlenecked. I’ve been thinking, planning and coming to some conclusions, so let me lay out what I’ve decided. First of all, you should know that according to the donation incentive scheme I’ve arbitrarily decided upon, there are four bonuses forthcoming. I think that, for starters, a total of $50 in donations is a good limit to set for earning one bonus chapter. That probably won’t pile up too quickly, so I’ll have time between them to work, but it also shouldn’t be a prohibitively high amount. When I first explained the problems I was having and set up my donation button, you wonderful people surpassed that within two days. And then, one very, very generous donor completely blew the lid off the whole thing with a gift that really saved my butt. Or my jaw, anyway.

    In thinking on that, what I’ve decided is that in addition to an overall $50 fund limit to earn one chapter, any single donation which exceeds that limit automatically warrants two. That particular donation, I decided, deserves three. It really was that generous. I won’t tell you who it was–I have a theory, but I’m not exactly sure, and more importantly I’m not sure what his stance is on personal privacy and I don’t want to give anything away if it’s not welcome, but regardless, as things stand, there are four chapters coming and we’re $20 into earning the next one.

    Now, at the moment, as I’ve said, I’m having kind of a rough time and not in great shape to work extra; the writing I’m putting in on TGaB is pretty much my creative limit in addition to the time I spend actually making a living. So! What I’ve decided as that when Volume One wraps up at the end of Book Four, we will take a short break for the main story and I’ll do those chapters as regular updates. I actually like this idea more the more I think on it; something to separate out the volumes will serve the story well, I think.

    The way I’ve envisioned it, one Volume will be one semester at the University; each will be bracketed by a prologue and epilogue. And, ultimately, each will be collected into an ebook and published thataway with a little bonus material. That’s not likely to happen right as Volume One finishes, for the reasons I’ve listed above. But it’ll be forthcoming.

    I also have some vacation time coming up soon, and I plan to spend it getting some writing in. Among other things, after Volume One is concluded, I mean to set up the donation counter and everything so that can be in place to start earning toward more bonuses, and before that comes about I want to have some bonus chapters finished and ready to post at need, so we don’t have a repeat of this situation. I hate making you guys wait for bonus content that I fully believe you’re entitled to; the spirit is willing, but the brain is weak.

    In addition to collecting each volume in an ebook, I intend, at the end of each volume, to publish a TGaB novella as a further bonus. This story is published in the tradition of the free Internet: there will never, ever be a cost to read it and follow along. Any additional material published behind any kind of paywall will be just that: additional. Nothing you’ll need to read in order to follow the story, in short, but some extra touches to add depth to the world and some of the characters we’ve gotten to know. The first one will feature Joe Jenkins, the Sarasio Kid, as a protagonist, and be set immediately after the current story arc. Unfortunately it’s not likely to be ready for some time, but it’ll be coming and I’ll keep you informed.

    I’d be delighted to hear any questions, complaints or comments about any of this! My plans are firmer now, but nothing is yet set in stone, and I’d love to know what you guys think before committing to anything further.

    And once again and as always, thank you. You guys keep me going.

    Onward and upward!

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  2. Re: donation bonuses, and fully IMO:
    Steady output is primarily what I am interested in. Bonuses are even better, but only if they don’t affect quality and consistency. I can’t speak for others, but I have lost interest in a number of otherwise good webcomics (my primary web entertainment, web serials are secondary) because of inconsistent updates, especially long unplanned hiatuses. This series has been posting consistently for five months, which already makes it unusual. Please keep up the good work.


  3. TGaB is a good read and there’s plenty of it even without any bonuses. I remember struggling to keep up with Worm when it was posted, you don’t need to try to match Wildbow’s posting rate!


  4. It’s funny how everyone mentions Wildbow. I actually have consciously emulated him on several points with regard to best practices–if you’re a webserialist starting out, What Would Wildbow Do? is a pertinent question. Only for business-related matters, though; I could never ape his style. I don’t at all mean to disparage his work, which I love and follow avidly. I just don’t think I have that kind of grimdark in me.

    TGaB was meant from the very beginning to be an epic high fantasy in the classic sense, and there is, I find, a built-in sense of optimism to that which has been slowly slipping away from the genre. Writers like Scott Lynch, Brent Weeks, David Dalglish and of course G.R.R. Martin seem to lay on the blood and gloom as if trying to prove that fantasy can be as gritty and true-to-life as anything. Which is fine; those are all brilliantly talented writers doing great work, and it most certainly works for them. It’s not my bag, though. I don’t believe fantasy has anything to prove, or that it needs to be one thing or the other. TGaB is certainly darker in its outlook than the earliest models of the genre, Tolkien and Lewis, but it also is heavier on humor than most fantasy, which I think balances out to make a pretty bright picture. I don’t mean that anybody has plot armor–you may note that all the characters who’ve died so far did so very shortly after their introduction. I just feel that a major character’s death should be as impactful for the readers as for the other characters, and you lose a lot of that when they’re dropping like flies in every direction. Shellshock sets in, people learn not to grow attached, and immersion suffers.

    This story is still in its earlier phases; as per the heroic arc, things will get grimmer as time passes. I’m never going to be Martin, though. I like a tale with hope and some optimism at its core.


    1. Clarification:
      I like Wildbow’s style but I am not advocating you take it up. I like your style and it allows you to address issues and situations and include character interactions that wouldn’t work in Wildbow’s work.

      As far as darkness, it should be appropriate to the author and situation. Worm was very grim and nasty, but (rot13 to avoid spoilers) vg ghearq bhg gung gur onpx fgbel rkcynvarq jul guvatf jrer tevz naq anfgl. I am still waiting for a similar revelation in Pact, but the suggestion that (rot13 to avoid spoilers) nyy qrzbaf jrer perngrq ol znaxvaq tbrf n ybat jnl gb rkcynvavat n ohapu bs penc va gur fgbel. That being said, it is fairly clear now that nasty people and situations are Wildbow’s stock in trade. I don’t want or expect that from every author. Variety is the spice of life.


      1. I’ve seen that in the Pact comment sections as well. What exactly is rot13? I’m assuming from context it’s something that’ll turn that gibberish into words.


      2. One of the most basic substitution ciphers: replace each letter with the letter 13 characters from it. When you get to Z start again with A. The ‘rot’ part stands for ‘rotate’ because the cipher is its own inverse – apply twice to get the original text back, so it rotates.
        If you try a little you can actually learn to read it – Wildbow says he can by now.

        Or, as AVR points out, the site rot13.com will do it for you.


    2. I don’t think.i.agree with brent weeks in that list.
      While his.works do have a certain grimes, there is also light to them.
      Especially his second four books.

      But yeah, that is nice from time to time, but I am jot a fan of it.becoming the new standard…


  5. Copy & paste into rot13.com & click cypher if you want to read some very minor/vague spoilers. I think it’s a cypher which replaces each letter with one 13 places removed in the alphabet.

    Rate of content generation was the point on which I was comparing your writing to Wildbows’. You may have noticed that you write a lot more than most webserials; the only currently active serials I can think of with more are Pact and maybe Castle Teribel.


  6. Typo/edit problem:
    “Brother Hernfeldt’s room was not large, nor ostentatious, but in keeping with Izarite aesthetics, it was more comfortable than the chambers of priests of other faiths tended to keep theirs.”
    The last part reads as “the chambers tended to keep theirs”. I assume it should be something like “more comfortable than how the priests of other faiths tended to keep their chambers”.


  7. Worm got too big to read. And therefore very boring. This book is decent but not the best. But it’s still well written. The story with either Erin or Catherine are well the best IMO.

    And that compares your writing to thousands of people.

    Be proud you’re that good.


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